Last Saturday, I made another attempt at creating a 24-hour comic. My first one was in 2008, failed to reach the required 24 pages and will never see the light of day. This second one failed worse than the first one, reaching only 11 pages. However, it allowed me to develop a concept that had been knocking around in my mind for over three years, and I'm actually rather pleased with the results. It also got some good responses through social media. On Tuesday, I added four pages to wrap up the story - or rather, the chapter, as I see this as a chapter in a much longer story that I very much want to make.
Read it here. All of it is as originally posted, including a typo that at the time of writing, I have not fixed. As a 24-hour comic, it's not the most polished art-wise, but you get used to that very quickly. I see this as a first draft of something that would need to be polished up and reworked later.
For a change, it's a G-rated comic that you can let your kid read as well, and I intend to keep that up, for the most part, if I ever get to continue it. Doing a child-friendly comic with children as lead characters again, six years after my work for Malmberg ended, was a revelation to me; I didn't remember it being as much fun as it was during this 24-hour comic event.
Please feel free to criticize any aspect of the story apart from the rough art - I already know that it's rough. As this is a first draft, there will be an opportunity to fix issues with character design, pacing, tone etcetera - but while I've got a laundry list of issues myself, what matters more is what other people spot. You can critique here (within 30 days after this is posted, after which the comments section closes automagically) or in the comments to the comic itself.